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Despite huge improvements in healthcare, the overall standard of physical health in many developed countries is now falling. What could be the reason for this trend, and what can be dome to reverse it?

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Healthcare
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 is the most important factor in a developed nation. Nowadays most
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the
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countries face a dangerous situation
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 the
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 fall. There are several facts
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, law capacity, out-of-stock medicine and lack of professionals. In
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 directly
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this
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 scenario.
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, scientists have identified COVID-19 as a man-made virus, which china made to attack the USA.
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 was a major reason for falling the quality of
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 in many stable regions. The other serious issue is the capacity
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 the hospitals.
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 enough capacity to save human lives in a pandemic situation.
Technology
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 revolution directly causes problems in hospitals. To prevent
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 can implement new rules on research and automation. There is a responsibility in everybody to help the
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 sector to maintain the standard. Government should allocate more funds for
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 from the
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 year's budget.
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 , Authorised individuals must use the funds to maintain the hospitals.
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 arrange training and workshops for the doctors, nurses and other relevant parties to improve their knowledge. In conclusion,It is true that
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 standards are falling
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 the rapid
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 in the modern world ,
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government
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 and society can prevent it by helping to develop it.
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