The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012.

The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012.
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The presented bar graph provides information about the proportion of
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members who worked in a university based on gender in 2012. Generally speaking, as provided from the chart, it is clearly shown that from seven faculties, male workers dominated the
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of engineering, law, sciences, and business, with the biggest margin found in the engineering
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.
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their counterpart spread in education, arts, and medicine. In terms of
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who are male, there was about 64
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of academic
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in the
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of business came from
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gender. compared to only 32
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of females who worked in
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. The chart shows that in the year 2012, three out of five
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working in law were males.
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at the same time, females only accounted for around 20 %. In science, it seems that during the period given, the male
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was dominated (about 62
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) by around 30%. During
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time, a huge difference was shown in engineering, as the number of male
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made up around 82% compared to below 20% of females.
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, it can be seen that the percentage of women working in education, and arts were around 60%, and 80% respectively.
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in medicine both genders shared an equal proportion.
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