Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?
The
vehicles
largely contributed to the traffic issues and pollution problems. It is
Unnecessary verb
apply
deterioration
the air quality as they make poison Replace the word
deteriorating
gass
. One of the Correct your spelling
gas
sollutions
to prevent Correct your spelling
solutions
this
issues
is rising the price of energy so that Fix the agreement mistake
issue
people
will use their vehicles
more wisely. However
, I extremely not agree with this
solution since it does not give a paramount impact, otherwise
it will have many drawbacks to economic conditions. In my opinion, upgrading the number of public Add a comma
,otherwise
transportations
will Fix the agreement mistake
transportation
perfectly
accepted by Add a missing verb
be perfectly
the
society.
The majority of Correct article usage
apply
people
believed that if the government establish these regulation
, the Change the determiner
this regulation
these regulations
economic
will began to deteriorate. Replace the word
economy
The energy
resources place Correct article usage
Energy
the
crucial role in Correct article usage
a
economic
situation in every Add an article
the economic
regions
. Change to a singular noun
region
For instance
, in Indonesia when the gass’s
price increased, the Correct your spelling
grass’s
good’s
prices Change noun form
goods
also
increased. Many people
were
suffered at that time as the government had not Unnecessary verb
apply
did
anything to overcome those situations. Change the verb form
done
Thus
, this
case reflected that rising the
energy prices not only Correct article usage
apply
affecting
vehicle users but Wrong verb form
affects
also
the people
in those country
.
Change the determiner
that country
those countries
Moreover
, these regulation
did not Change the determiner
this regulation
these regulations
illustrates
any paramount improvement. The users who owned Change the verb form
illustrate
vehicles
definitely can afford the gass
without any struggles. The wealth of the vehicle owners and non-vehicle owners is distinctive, Correct your spelling
gas
consequently
the chances of obtaining potential issues will deteriorate. Add a comma
,consequently
For example
, the
wealthy persons will not have any hesitation adding more credits as long as they can ride their Correct article usage
apply
vehicles
, meanwhile
the Add a comma
,meanwhile
taxi’s
driver will Change noun form
taxi
gained
more credits lost. Afterwards, the air quality not getting any better Change the verb form
gain
while
many people
try more
harder to survive.
In conclusion, it is not a wise solution in terms of reducing Change the word
apply
the
pollution. There are more drawbacks than Correct article usage
apply
the
beneficial impacts of Correct article usage
apply
this
policy. However
, I suggest that the government can educated
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educate
people
to use public transportations
and increase their quality.Fix the agreement mistake
transportation
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