Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

The
vehicles
largely contributed to the traffic issues and pollution problems. It
is
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deterioration
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the air quality as they make poison
gass
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gas
. One of the
sollutions
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solutions
to prevent
this
issues
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is rising the price of energy so that
people
will use their
vehicles
more wisely.
However
, I extremely not agree with
this
solution since it does not give a paramount impact,
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it will have many drawbacks to economic conditions. In my opinion, upgrading the number of public
transportations
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will
perfectly
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accepted by
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society. The majority of
people
believed that if the government establish
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, the
economic
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will began to deteriorate.
The energy
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resources place
the
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crucial role in
economic
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situation in every
regions
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.
For instance
, in Indonesia when the
gass’s
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grass’s
price increased, the
good’s
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prices
also
increased. Many
people
were
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suffered at that time as the government had not
did
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anything to overcome those situations.
Thus
,
this
case reflected that rising
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energy prices not only
affecting
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vehicle users but
also
the
people
in
those country
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.
Moreover
,
these regulation
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did not
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any paramount improvement. The users who owned
vehicles
definitely can afford the
gass
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gas
without any struggles. The wealth of the vehicle owners and non-vehicle owners is distinctive,
consequently
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the chances of obtaining potential issues will deteriorate.
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,
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wealthy persons will not have any hesitation adding more credits as long as they can ride their
vehicles
,
meanwhile
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the
taxi’s
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driver will
gained
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more credits lost. Afterwards, the air quality not getting any better
while
many
people
try
more
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harder to survive. In conclusion, it is not a wise solution in terms of reducing
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pollution. There are more drawbacks than
the
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beneficial impacts of
this
policy.
However
, I suggest that the government can
educated
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people
to use public
transportations
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and increase their quality.
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  • Urban planning
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