Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Other's however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The rate of committing
crime
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a crime
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is on the rise. Some state that we should vary the methods of
punishment
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according to
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individual circumstances and motivation to perform criminal
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I will discuss both views and discuss my opinion on the
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, using an approach with fixed
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will save a lot of time
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policemen and lawyers. With the rising number of criminal cases, it is hard to allocate time to skim through every single criminal activity.
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, if we can provide
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a fixed list of
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for certain crimes it is easier to process.
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, some victims may think that having fixed
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specific crimes is unfair from their side. They would want to include their discomfort caused by the criminal to be justified by the law.
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crime range from minor to severe depending on the number of attempts, motivation, and severity.
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,
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range from imprisonment,
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sentence, and capital
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. It is evident that some atrocious activities caused by serial killers can not be punished in the same way
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a
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thief
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, in my opinion, criminal offences should take many factors
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as motivation,
severity
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the severity
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of the crime, individual mindset, and severity of the damage caused to the victim party,
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consideration before giving
punishment
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fixed punishments
  • consistency
  • predictability
  • deter crime
  • potential offenders
  • streamline
  • judicial process
  • bias
  • corruption
  • complexity
  • human behavior
  • circumstances
  • justice system
  • intent
  • remorse
  • socio-economic background
  • rehabilitate offenders
  • recidivism rates
  • flexible punishment systems
  • inconsistencies
  • perceived injustices
  • public trust
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