Earlier working from home was discouraged. Nowadays, many organizations are encouraging telecommuting. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages. Support your opinion with examples.
Many companies allow their
workers
to Use synonyms
work
from home Use synonyms
Linking Words
while
in the past was not permitted. Correct word choice
which
Although
I accept that have Linking Words
negative
impact Add an article
a negative
for
both Change preposition
on
employeer
and employees, I believed working remotely from houses have superiorities over the demerits Correct your spelling
employers
employer
such
as less stress and saving more money for overhead Linking Words
cost
, overtaking the drawbacks.
In negative views, from Use synonyms
employeer
perception, they perceived working from home is not beneficial for Correct your spelling
employer
employee
Use synonyms
workers
productivity. Change noun form
workers'
worker's
This
happens because organizations could not control their Linking Words
worker
working hours how many Fix the agreement mistake
workers
Use synonyms
time
they Fix the agreement mistake
times
starting
to Wrong verb form
start
work
and make sure they do not Use synonyms
doing
Change the verb form
do
another
household Correct quantifier usage
other
activity
Fix the agreement mistake
activities
while
in Linking Words
meeting
or doing Fix the agreement mistake
meetings
work
Use synonyms
assignment
, but Fix the agreement mistake
assignments
Linking Words
this problems
could be done if Change the determiner
this problem
these problems
enterpraises
have Correct your spelling
enterprises
strick
rules and regulations to ensure their employees Correct your spelling
strict
work
well even they do not have to go to Use synonyms
office
. From Add an article
the office
an office
labour
perspective, they could not focus when they Add an article
a labour
in
their home, Add a missing verb
are in
is
caused by manyCorrect pronoun usage
which is
distraction
Change to a plural noun
distractions
such
as doing chores, noises or unstable internet connection. Linking Words
This
is because, their houses Linking Words
not
properly built for working Add a missing verb
are not
condition
, so they Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
easily
Add a missing verb
are easily
to distract
, making them demotivated. Perhaps, in order to help them Change the verb form
distracted
work
Use synonyms
with
Change preposition
in
proper
Add an article
the proper
a proper
condition
, they could Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
saving
their transportation Change the verb form
save
be saving
cost
to buy proper equipment for Use synonyms
works
.
In positive views, working remotely could help Fix the agreement mistake
work
their
Correct pronoun usage
apply
worker
to Replace the word
work
saving
more energy for daily commuting which Change the verb form
save
making
them lessen their stress, and could Wrong verb form
makes
using
their spare Change the form of the verb
use
time
to improve their skills or engage with their family. Use synonyms
This
is to say, Linking Words
workers
who must Use synonyms
commuting
daily might spending their Change the verb form
commute
be commuting
time
more than 2 hours if that Use synonyms
time
is Use synonyms
spend
to improve their Change the form of the verb
spent
capabilites
for Correct your spelling
capabilities
working
purposes, would Replace the word
work
brings
benefits for their future careers. Change the verb form
bring
Moreover
, Linking Words
this
could Linking Words
benefits
Change the verb form
benefit
for
Change preposition
apply
employeer
to reduce overhead Correct your spelling
employer
employees
Use synonyms
cost
, Fix the agreement mistake
costs
saving
Correct word choice
and saving
their
money to expand their business. When companies Correct pronoun usage
them
does
not need to spend their Change the verb form
do
expanditure
Correct your spelling
expenditure
expenditures
for
office facilities and rent, Change preposition
on
this
could save Linking Words
enormous
budget for Correct article usage
an enormous
open
new business from those, and their market could be expanded, so make them become Replace the word
opening
market
leader. eventually, Add an article
a market
the market
this
Linking Words
benefits
is Fix the agreement mistake
benefit
win-win
solution for both sides.
Add an article
a win-win
To conclude
, I totally agree to encourage telecommuting Linking Words
work
, Use synonyms
this
would Linking Words
overtaking
the drawbacks in order to tackle Wrong verb form
overtake
mental
health Correct article usage
the mental
problem
Fix the agreement mistake
problems
on
Change preposition
of
workers
and Use synonyms
expanding
Wrong verb form
expand
Correct article usage
the company
company
new business Change noun form
company's
from
saving their Change preposition
by
Use synonyms
cost
. where is possible to combine Fix the agreement mistake
costs
this
approach with hybrid working Linking Words
condition
, so Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
their
both side would have Correct pronoun usage
that
win-win
Add an article
a win-win
the win-win
solution
to solve the demerits.Fix the agreement mistake
solutions
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