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Nowadays a large amount of advertising aimed at children should be banned because of the negative effects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Public concern has risen about whether advertising aimed at
children
 should be banned because of
the
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 negative effects. Since we are living in the information age, everything is digital - including
advertisements
. I tend to believe that advertising aimed at
children
 should be prohibited and in
this
 essay, I will explain why.
To begin
 with,
children
 are easily influenced by
advertisements
.
Due to
 the fact that there are numerous
advertisements
 showing up on television
everyday
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 and they cannot be skipped,
kids
 are forced to watch them.
For instance
, a junk food (chips, hamburgers, fizzy drinks…) commercial showed up on TV.
Children
, especially younger ones, might not know that junk food is unhealthy, or they know, but they are deeply convinced by the commercial;
thus
,
this
 could result in the
next
 step of asking (or even forcing) parents to buy the unhealthy food or them secretly buying and eating it.
Secondly
, certain
advertisements
 put
children
's safety at risk. We often see either a written warning under an advertisement related to
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 or extreme sports, which can be written like “do not do
this
 at home”, or an oral warning. It is common for
kids
 to conceive and think about “what if I do
this
?”.
Consequently
, if
children
, especially ones under ten years old, perceived the message falsely and tried to imitate some dangerous actions done in a commercial, it would be a disaster not only for themselves
,
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 but
also
 for parents.
In contrast
, some may think that adverts have a positive side, too. Undeniably, there are a number of
advertisements
 that perceive helpful ideas for
childrens’
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 mental growth or possess a good message.
However
, these commercials usually show up in
the
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specific channels for
kids
, the majority of adverts are still exposed to
children
 and may contain a message that
kids
 may not understand correctly.
To sum up
, there is ample reason
suggesting
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 that we should prohibit advertising aimed at
children
 in terms of the negative influence given to them and safety risks. Since the main idea of
advertisements
 is to motivate consumers to purchase them or draw attention to certain actions,
therefore
, adverts surely have a negative impact on
children
.
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