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Your teacher has asked you to write an essay about why it is important to have friends giving reasons for your opinion.

#teacher #friends
The motto of the three musketeers:
“One
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is “One
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 for all, all for one.” Let it be the motto of all who respect friendship.
Friends
 are very important. It means supporting someone and being there for bad and good. I think that it is important for every person to have true
friends
 in their life. First of all,
friends
 support you in your goals and decisions. They help you get
though
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through
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 your problems without worry.
For example
, always listen to you and are ready to give you advice.
Moreover
, when you have
friends
 around you, feel happy,
safety
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 and supported because there is someone to share your joy and problems
.
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 Often there are arguments between
friends
, but
this
 does not mean that the friendship between them is broken. They find
the
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 way to forgive and make amends. On the other side, there are people who pretend to be
friends
 and would not support you.
For instance
, they do not care about you.
As a result
, you would choose people who really care about you because you could get into trouble. In my opinion, friendship is very important because you know who really cares
of
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 you. True
friends
 are always there when you need them, that's why they are the most important in a person's life.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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