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People often find it difficult to adapt to new situations in their lives. Why do you think this is? What measures can you suggest to make it easier?

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people
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the people
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 try hard to have a stable
situation
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 find it difficult to
change
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,sometimes
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 better to
change
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 on that. One of the main
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 for
this
 thought is that a wide variety of
people
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situation
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society.By way of
example
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 they try hard to find a job
that
is suit
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 them and feel comfortable
then
 they do not want to
change
 their job. Another reason is most
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people
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the people
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fear
to
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conversion
their
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 lifestyle.
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, they don't know
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 them a tedious routine which
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 a big problem in the future. The most obvious remedy is that
people
 should believe in
them selves
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themselves
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 thanks to the fact that
the
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they
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 can reach every position in their lives that they want .
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,
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 will
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, to work on
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 property they can read books and watch some movies to help them through
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their
fear
. In conclusion,
due to
 the fact that
people
 often try hard and have a
fear
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 they do not want to adapt to new
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.
on the other
hand
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its
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 may make some problems.but
people
 can read books and watch
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the movie
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movie
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movies
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 to help
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 to
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not have
this
fear
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fear of the unknown
  • Comfort zone
  • Familiar
  • Inherently uncertain
  • Challenges
  • Necessary tools
  • Skills
  • Efficiently
  • Emotional ties
  • Stress and anxiety
  • Overwhelming
  • Cultural backgrounds
  • Social backgrounds
  • Adaptable
  • Change management
  • Coping strategies
  • Resilience
  • Support network
  • Preparation
  • Flexibility
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