Doctors, nurses and teacher make a great contribution to society and should be payed more than entertainment and sports. Do you agree or disagree?

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As teachers and

doctors

invest their efforts to teach and

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government should allocate more budget for them than

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and

sports

. I agree with both options as they

are have

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own

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advantages. On the one hand,

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money

for

teacher

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and

doctors

is good for society because it can be

reason

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for improvement. By increasing

salary

of teachers and

doctors

we can increase productivity at

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. Recently from social media

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I saw that 75% of

doctors

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feed their

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rate of the teacher

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higher than

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is consist

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96.7%. By the

statistics

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we are able to know they can not work well as there tired by

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job.

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receive more

salary

their productivity at work

increase

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and it means that society will be smart and healthy

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their help.

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and

entertainments

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is good too. By spending more

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the

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sport we can create

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interests

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it and they can make popular our country. From

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called "Time" we are able to know that during the world cup

2022

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Qatar's budget filled during the 3

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due to

increasing the rate of tourism.

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waste a lot of

salary

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sports

for instance

for gifts like

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house

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and others. Youngsters started

interesting

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about

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sports

because of

money

. Taking everything into consideration, I think that government should

spent

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salary

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unti

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until

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our tourism and

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teachers and

doctors

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