Doctors, nurses and teacher make a great contribution to society and should be payed more than entertainment and sports. Do you agree or disagree?

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invest their efforts to teach and

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government should allocate more budget for them than

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. I agree with both options as they

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is good for society because it can be

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for improvement. By increasing

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of teachers and

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we can increase productivity at

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and it means that society will be smart and healthy

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their help.

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is good too. By spending more

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sport we can create

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it and they can make popular our country. From

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called "Time" we are able to know that during the world cup

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increasing the rate of tourism.

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and others. Youngsters started

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because of

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. Taking everything into consideration, I think that government should

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

264 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

indispensable
societal wellbeing
monetary compensation
socioeconomic status
market forces
public funding
revenue generation
lasting effects
societal values
governmental policy
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Doctors, nurses and teacher make a great contribution to society and should be payed more than entertainment and sports. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific world, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Employers should give their staff at least a 4-week holiday a year to help employees perform better in their jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that the government should spend more money in putting in more works of art like painting and statutes in cities to make them better places to live in. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

task 2: Some cities have vehicle-free days when private cars, trucks and motorcycles are banned from the city center. People are encouraged to use public transportation such as buses, taxis and metro on vehicle-free days. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?