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Some people think that studying literature from the past is a waste of time for high school students. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Most people claim that
information
 from the old
literature
 is obsolete and study by them is a waste of time for students.
This
 essay will demonstrate how
an old
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old books
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books
 can be useful for students but will
also
 show that
this
 can lead to
irrelevance
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the irrelevance
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 of
literature
 from the past. Whilst acknowledging that there are advantages, the essay will argue that the drawbacks of outdated
literature
 outweigh the pros. On the one hand, old
literature
 is a basis of the whole new, which is
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 everywhere. By
this
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 I mean that a new
books
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book
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 has the same
information
 but with
an additional
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additional information
a piece of additional information
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information
.
Therefore
, all new
literature
 is based on
books
 from the past because
this
information
 is qualitative.
Moreover
, learning outdated
literature
 will never waste the time, because they have more precise
information
.
For instance
, when I prepared for my national exam, I realized that
information
 in old
books
are
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is
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 more
completed
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, even if it is a little bit complicated. Old
literature
,
on the other hand
, can easily be irrelevant today
due to
 the fact that
information
 updates quickly.
Thus
, many arguments and states can be meaningless.
Furthermore
, some strategies and techniques
giving
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given
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 in the outdated
literature
 might have no relation to today's era because all the areas,
such
 as science, education,
medicine
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and medicine
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 develop every day, so it leads to adding
a new
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new information
a piece of new information
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information
 as fast as possible.
For example
, medicine
literature
 updates rapidly, so some pills and treatment ways are replaced by new ones.
To conclude
,
although
and
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apply
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old
books
 can be helpful
giving
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in giving
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the
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apply
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students high-quality knowledge, they should be careful and check the
information
 for relevance.
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