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Your teacher has asked you to write an essay about why it is important to have friends giving reasons for your opinion.

#teacher #friends
In my opinion, it is very important to have real
friends
. First of all,
friends
 are like family. You choose your
friends
 and you have to make careful decisions.
Friends
 supporting you, encouraging you, trusting you, protecting you and so many other things. Because of
that
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 you have to choose the right person.
Friendship
 is for two or many people. Sometimes you make wrong decisions but that gives experience. True
friends
 are
next
 to you in hard times and happy
moments
. Your circle of
friends
 shapes you as a person.
In addition
, happy
moments
 and even sad
moments
 with
friends
 make unforgettable memories. One of the most important feelings in
friendship
 is trust, without
this
 it can’t be
friendship
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. Of course, every
friendship
 sometimes has a dispute but it makes it stronger, in these
moments
 need to solve the problem by calmly talking. People are different and it’s normal to have problems sometimes.True
friends
 have to be able to say everything to each other. He/She can be your “mother” and give you advice which is better than your mother's. In conclusion,
friendship
 is the most important thing in life after
the
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health, of course. To have
friends
 like these, to help you in everything and be able to count on them is a real treasure.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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