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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and conclude any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

#people #professionals #doctors #engineers #work #country
In
this
 globalized world, the demand for professional experts like healthcare providers and engineers,
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 increasing day by day.
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for
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 their nations
while
 others have the idea that
thes
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their
 professional careers have
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 to choose another destination which is far away from their motherlands
according to
 their desire. I suppose that both ideas have advantages and disadvantages. During the Covid-19 pandemic
situation
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 everyone understood the importance of developing
healthcare
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 system strongly. So, they gave train for them to give a quality service
for
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 patients in their countries. These
work forces
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 are the value of the nation,
otherwise
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 government can’t achieve their goals successfully.
Moreover
,
these intelligent person
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 must give their
servise
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service
services
 to improve the health facilities and infrastructure facilities to build up
economy
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 of their country as a
repay
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 for giving free education.
For instance
, as Sri Lanka had
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excellent health management with the support of
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doctors, nurses and other medical providers, we could able to manage the impact of Covid-19.
In contrast
,
these specialist
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 should have
freedom
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 to
expirence
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experience
the
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internation
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international
Internation
 training by working in another country. It makes a chance to improve their skills and apply new scientific innovations
while
expirence
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experience
 the diversity of the communities.
Furthermore
, they will be
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investment
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 and bring foreign currency to their country.
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, it may
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be cause
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 to collapse
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 whole system of their fields
such
 as medicine, education, construction, etc. The productivity and the quality of the services are
also
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as they migrate from their territory.
To sum up
,
according to
 my point of view, career experts have
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rights
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 to choose their working environment,
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 it will damage
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the entire system.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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