Some people say that to prevent illness and disease, governments should focus more on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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reducing the trouble of habitations and surroundings in order to stop diseases that have been

spreads

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out. Based on

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statement, I partially agree because of the effect on

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public health. To commence with, it is commonly true that a lot of

ilness

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illness

illnesses

are

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caused by pollution. If the

goverment

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government

emphasizes the law to operate the factory with less contamination and arrange the waste of household, the cause of infections might be reduced.

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, people who suffered

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diseases related to

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,

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as asthma, bronchitis, and pneumonia will have a gradual decrease owing to less

polution

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pollution

and contaminations, resulting in the growth of quality of life. Another point to consider is

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illness that does not have any connection with pollution,

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as coronary heart disease, hypertension, diabetes, and stroke, that

connected

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with food and lack of exercise. In

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condition, the government's work for reducing poisonous effects is useless.

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, they must develop

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health services to educate

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society.

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, each individual will improve their knowledge and maintain their health, resulting to prevent several implications. To illustrate

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, the nutritionist should explain to the crowd about

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diet, superb menus, and the importance of

exercises

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to boost

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immunity.

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, I partially agree to make the authority only

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environmental issues. Despite

to focus

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focusing

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on lowering the number of pollution and housing issues, the authority

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contributed

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on

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a problem

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problem

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related to education.