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The graph below shows the average daily sales of selected food items at the Brisk Café, by season. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average daily sales of selected food items at the Brisk Café, by season. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph shows how many
servings
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 of certain
food
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 items are sold on average every day in two different seasons at the Brisk Café. The average
number
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 of
sales
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 of each
item
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 changed with the season. Certain
food
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 items had much higher
sales
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 than others in the winter. Hot
coffee
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 had the highest
number
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 of
sales
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, with an average of 75
servings
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 sold daily.
Following
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this
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, the
item
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 with the second highest
number
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 of
sales
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 was soup, with an average of 50
servings
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 sold daily. Salad and ice cream had average daily
sales
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 of 25
servings
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 each, and iced
coffee
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 had the lowest
number
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 of
sales
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, with close to zero
servings
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 sold daily. The
sales
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 numbers for each
food
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item
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 were different in the summer from what they were in the winter. Iced
coffee
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sales
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 rose significantly, to an average of 40
servings
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 sold daily. The
item
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 that had the second highest
number
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 of
sales
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 was ice cream, with an average of 35
servings
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 sold daily. Hot
coffee
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sales
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 fell to just 30
servings
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 daily. Soup and salad had the lowest
number
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 of
sales
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, with 25
servings
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 sold daily on average. In general, the average daily
sales
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 of each
food
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item
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 changed when the season changed. Certain items were more popular in the winter, but certain others were more popular in the summer.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words servings, food, number, sales, item, coffee with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Average daily sales
  • Selected food items
  • Seasonal variation
  • Trends
  • Fluctuations
  • Comparison
  • Preferences
  • Anomalies
  • Promotions
  • Stock adjustment
  • Seasonal influence
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