In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents who educate their children themselves at home instead of sending them.

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There are more parents who prefer their
children
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to
study
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at
home
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rather than
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school
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at school
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, in some countries.
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However
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I disagree
that
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opinion. Because teachers have
own
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their own
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experience and structure for
students
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. In
this
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essay
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I will explain why I think so in an open and understandable way through examples.
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with,
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study
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a study
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in
school
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students
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can improve
interpersonal
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their interpersonal
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skills. Since many
students
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of the same age are gathered in the
school
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children
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can
learn
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communicate with others and deal with people.
For instance
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,
children
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need to share and learn to compromise
while
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they are playing.
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, kids may develop a sense of selflessness because they consider others more after getting
along with
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a group of people
instead
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of their own family.
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,
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a study
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study
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studying
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in
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at
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home
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Firstly
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students
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have a lot of time
than
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to
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study
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in
school
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. They are spent time
for
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with
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their family and friends.
Secondly
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, parents not used too much money.
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result
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they don't have
a financial problems
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financial problems
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.
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, if
children
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study
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at
home
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,they will learn independently and become
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apply
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independently
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person
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people
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throughout
his
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their
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life.
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, comparing a
home
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-educated
child
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with a
school
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-educated
child
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, a
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home educated
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home-educated
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child
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can think more independently than a
school
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-educated
child
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. In conclusion, I think
children
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should be in
school
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and there are many good things about it.
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, studying at
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develops the
children
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's
brain
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when they
discussing
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discuss
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with people. But
home
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-schooling
also
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has
it's
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its
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advantages
,
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because it gives
children
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freedom and independence.
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