In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents who educate their children themselves at home instead of sending them.
There are more parents who prefer their
children
to study
at home
rather than school
, in some countries. Change preposition
at school
However
I disagree Add a comma
,However
that
opinion. Because teachers have Change preposition
with that
own
experience and structure for Correct pronoun usage
their own
students
. In this
essay
I will explain why I think so in an open and understandable way through examples.
Add a comma
,essay
To begin
with, study
in Add an article
a study
school
students
can improve interpersonal
skills. Since many Correct pronoun usage
their interpersonal
students
of the same age are gathered in the school
children
can learn
communicate with others and deal with people. Add the particle
tolearn
For instance
, children
need to share and learn to compromise while
they are playing. Therefore
, kids may develop a sense of selflessness because they consider others more after getting along with
a group of people instead
of their own family.
On the other hand
, Add an article
a study
study
Wrong verb form
studying
in
Change preposition
at
home
Firstly
students
have a lot of time than
Change preposition
to
study
in school
. They are spent time for
their family and friends. Change preposition
with
Secondly
, parents not used too much money. As a
result
they don't have Add a comma
,result
a financial problems
. Correct the article-noun agreement
financial problems
a financial problem
Finally
, if children
study
at home
,they will learn independently and become an
Correct article usage
apply
independently
Change the adverb
independent
person
throughout Fix the agreement mistake
people
his
life. Correct pronoun usage
their
For example
, comparing a home
-educated child
with a school
-educated child
, a home educated
Add a hyphen
home-educated
child
can think more independently than a school
-educated child
.
In conclusion, I think children
should be in school
and there are many good things about it. In addition
, studying at school
develops the children
's brain
when they Fix the agreement mistake
brains
discussing
with people. But Wrong verb form
discuss
home
-schooling also
has it's
advantagesCorrect your spelling
its
,
because it gives Remove the comma
apply
children
freedom and independence.Submitted by makemoneyizzy16 on
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