In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents who educate their children themselves at home instead of sending them.
There are more parents who prefer their
children
to Use synonyms
study
at Use synonyms
home
rather than Use synonyms
Use synonyms
school
, in some countries. Change preposition
at school
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However
I disagree Add a comma
,However
that
opinion. Because teachers have Change preposition
with that
own
experience and structure for Correct pronoun usage
their own
students
. In Use synonyms
this
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essay
I will explain why I think so in an open and understandable way through examples.
Add a comma
,essay
To begin
with, Linking Words
Use synonyms
study
in Add an article
a study
school
Use synonyms
students
can improve Use synonyms
interpersonal
skills. Since many Correct pronoun usage
their interpersonal
students
of the same age are gathered in the Use synonyms
school
Use synonyms
children
can Use synonyms
learn
communicate with others and deal with people. Add the particle
tolearn
For instance
, Linking Words
children
need to share and learn to compromise Use synonyms
while
they are playing. Linking Words
Therefore
, kids may develop a sense of selflessness because they consider others more after getting Linking Words
along with
a group of people Linking Words
instead
of their own family.
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On the other hand
, Linking Words
Use synonyms
Add an article
a study
study
Wrong verb form
studying
in
Change preposition
at
home
Use synonyms
Firstly
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students
have a lot of time Use synonyms
than
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to
study
in Use synonyms
school
. They are spent time Use synonyms
for
their family and friends. Change preposition
with
Secondly
, parents not used too much money. Linking Words
As a
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result
they don't have Add a comma
,result
a financial problems
. Correct the article-noun agreement
financial problems
a financial problem
Finally
, if Linking Words
children
Use synonyms
study
at Use synonyms
home
,they will learn independently and become Use synonyms
an
Correct article usage
apply
independently
Change the adverb
independent
person
throughout Fix the agreement mistake
people
his
life. Correct pronoun usage
their
For example
, comparing a Linking Words
home
-educated Use synonyms
child
with a Use synonyms
school
-educated Use synonyms
child
, a Use synonyms
Use synonyms
home educated
Add a hyphen
home-educated
child
can think more independently than a Use synonyms
school
-educated Use synonyms
child
.
In conclusion, I think Use synonyms
children
should be in Use synonyms
school
and there are many good things about it. Use synonyms
In addition
, studying at Linking Words
school
develops the Use synonyms
children
's Use synonyms
brain
when they Fix the agreement mistake
brains
discussing
with people. But Wrong verb form
discuss
home
-schooling Use synonyms
also
has Linking Words
it's
advantagesCorrect your spelling
its
,
because it gives Remove the comma
apply
children
freedom and independence.Use synonyms
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