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Band 4.5

You have a Facebook friend living in another country and s/he is curious to learn about a major news item in your country. Write a letter to your Facebook friend. In your letter describe a news story in your country explain why people are interested in it say how the story personally relates to you

#facebook #friend #country #news #item #story #people
Dear
shane
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, I hope you and
family
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your family
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is
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are
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 doing
good
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well
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.
Iam
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I am
 the person who met
before
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two weeks in
facebook
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Facebook
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 and
dicussed
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discussed
 about so many topics which are happening nowadays. In
middle
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the middle
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 of our conversation, you ask me for visiting my state as a tourist. Now, today
i
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I
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 need to inform you about the discounts that had made by our government for visitors like air travel charges which is having 30% discounts and hotels or resorts
contains
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contain
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40
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a 40
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% deduction from
actual
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the actual
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 amount during the stay of
journey
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the journey
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. In
this
 season, people are very much
in
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intrested
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interested
 in travelling
my
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to my
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 state because of
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the beautifull
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beautifull
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beautiful
 views and attractions like
tirupathi
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Tirupathi
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 and more.
i
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I
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 feel so much glad to discuss
this
 topic and
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want
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wants
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 know how eagerly waiting you are to travel to my state and
its
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it's
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 my responsibility to guide you till the end of your day. I request
to
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you to
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 plan the schedule for
this
 visit and inform me as soon as possible. Thank you so much for your patience and
listening
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for listening
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 to my words.
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If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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