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What are the advantages and disadvantages of owning car?

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While
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 some
people
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 think owning a
car
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 has a lot of disadvantages.
However
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, I consider that there are more
myrid
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myriad
 of advantages than drawbacks.
To begin
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 with,the main advantage of having a
car
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 can favour
people
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 to make money. So, some
people
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 can make a living by
work
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working
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 as a driver.
Moreover
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, owning a private
car
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 means
car
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 owners can go
to
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apply
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wherever they want without having to rely on public
transports
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transport
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.
In addition
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, using a private
car
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 play
crucial
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a crucial
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 role on a daily basis.
For instance
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,
the
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people
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 who have
a
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their
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 own
car
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 can use it for commuting to and from work.
Finally
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, owning a
car
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 is it
give
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a great sense of freedom. Especially, the drivers can take a long trip and take control of who gets in and out of their
car
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. The main worry about having a
car
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 can be fossil fuels which are produced by cars.So
that
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apply
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, most
of
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apply
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the
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people
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 have to spend
more
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more
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money on their
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cars
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car
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. What's more, repairing a
car
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 can be costly. On the contrary, private cars can not carry many passengers as
a public transport
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public transport
a means of public transport
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.
Furthermore
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, driving a
car
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 always caused
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a
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huge traffic
jam
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jams
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.
Therefore
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,
the
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car
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 owners need to worry about the safety and parking
place
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places
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for
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of
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their cars.
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, paying huge taxes and drivers have to renew
the
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car
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 insurance and licence.
To sum up
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, in despite of wasting money on
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car
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car
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's expenses, the private
car
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 is a very useful vehicle that offers plenty of opportunities than demerits to its owners.

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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Manufacturing output
  • Production trend
  • Significant peak
  • Notable decline
  • Fluctuation
  • Technological advancements
  • Economic challenges
  • Consumer demand
  • Sustainability
  • Government regulation
  • Predictive analysis
  • Market dynamics
  • Environmental impact
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