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Write about the following topic: In some countries children have very strict rules of behaviour, while in other countries they are allowed to do almost anything they want. To what extent should children have to follow rules? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#topic #countries #children #rules #behaviour
In some
countries
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,countries
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 children have very strict
rules
 of behaviour,
while
 in other countries they are allowed to do whatever they want. Parents teach their
kids
 to be kind
with
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to
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 everyone in a good manner.
further
, they will suggest not to be rude to your friends and people who are elder than you.
Moreover
, guardians will think their child to be polite, eat properly,
sitting
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sit
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silent
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silently
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 and
playing
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play
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 with best friends.
Firstly
, good family
rules
guides
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guide
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childerns
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children
children's
 behaviour in
a
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the
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 right way. they say exactly what way of behaving you expect.
For example
, we speak to each other with respect like please, thanks and sorry.
Moreover
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 they can tell their
kids
 to be clean and tidy. We have to make
rules
 about physical behaviour, safety, daily routines and screen use.
For instance
, tell your
mothet
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mother
 or father about you met the person
wants
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who wants
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 to be your friend
which
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but
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 you have never
meet
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met
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 him.
Secondly
, many countries have
a punishable
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punishable rules
a punishable rule
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rules
 against both
kids
 and parents like guardians should not violate their
kids
 or beat them and less caring is a punishable offence in some multinational areas.
Aswellas
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As well as
 in
yougsters
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youngsters
 there are some limitations in watching smartphones and
televisions
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television
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 and
also
 prefer the family should be
loving
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a loving
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 and
nuturing
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nurturing
 environment. In my point of view, every nationality is having different guidelines for youngsters by keeping in mind
on
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apply
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age, environment, diseases and
genitical
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genetic
genetical
 disorders and every big member
in
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of
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 a family
have
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has
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 a right
on
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to
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 their little one.
to conclude
, humans should be more concentrated
baout
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about
 their little
ones
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ones'
one's
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 life, studies, health and
mental
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their mental
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 way of acting towards other
collegues
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colleagues
.
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