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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #reason #language #travel #work #country #someone
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individuals believe that the only motive for learning a foreign
language
 is in purpose to move to or work in
a
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 overseas country,
while
 others think that why someone
need
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 to learn a foreign
language
. On the one hand, learning
overseas
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language
 has many advantages for
people
.
Firstly
, it would give
people
 the experience of other cultures and perspectives.
This
 means
that is
best
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 way to be fluent in a second
language
.
For instance
, if
people
 surrounding by masters of
language
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 they can easily learn
the
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another
language
 without any difficulties.
Secondly
 working abroad would provide
people
 with the opportunity of getting a well-paid job.
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,
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a
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work in
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 restaurant
they
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can earn
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 high salary because of
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 to speak
in
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English
.
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On the other hand
, moving or working is not the only option why
people
 learn abroad languages. Some
people
 claim that learning a new
language
give
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 a myriad of chances to the
people
.
This
 is because, individuals have
a
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 interest
to
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 watching original movies in
foreign
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language
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,
furthermore
, they want to
learning
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language
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. There is no doubt that the popularity of Turkish dramas has been increasing in the
last
 few years which
attract
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 many fans all around the world who wish to know more about
Tyrkish
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Turkish
 culture. Thereby,
people
 learn the Turkish
language
 with the purpose of fulfilling their curiosity about Turkish.
To sum up
, there are
also
 some
people
 who learn second languages as part of their curiosity. I believe whatever the reasons why
people
 use foreign languages, as long as it brings good impacts for their life
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 it would be fine.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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