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some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in aforeign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn aforeign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #reason #language #travel #work #aforeign #country #someone
In recent years, many
people
 are willing to learn a foreign
language
. Some
population
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populations
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 believe that
people
study
 a foreign
language
 in order to
work
 or
similar
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for similar
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 reasons and others have
opposite
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the opposite
an opposite
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 view. In my opinion, Most
people
 learn
new
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a new
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language
 to reach their aims
such
 as
study
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studying
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 and
work
 even making friends. On the one hand, A group of individuals
justifaiblay
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justifiably
 argue that
only
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the only
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 reason
can
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that can
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 lead to learning
new
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a new
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languge
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language
languages
 is
prepration
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preparation
 for travel or
work
.
In other words
, the employee who
want
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wants
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get
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to get
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 a promotion should try to rise their
language
 levels. In my personal
experinces
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experiences
experience
, when I want to move
Italy
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to Italy
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for
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to
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study
, I started to
study
Italian
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the Italian
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language
.
Thus
, I had a
study
 reason to
learning
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learn
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 new languages.
On the other hand
, some
people
 claim that
for
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apply
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learning a foreign
language
do
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does
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 not
need
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toneed
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 have a purpose like
as
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apply
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work
 or
study
. From
an
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a
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 medical viewpoint, learning
new
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a new
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language
 can
avoide
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avoid
 from mental problems
such
 as
Alzheimer
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Alzheimer's
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 disease.
For instance
, learning
new
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a new
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language
 like
as
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apply
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learing
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learning
new
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a new
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skil
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skill
skills
 can help to protect mental health.
Moreover
, A vast number of
people
 who
study
 new languages would
broade
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broaden
 their
horizens
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horizons
.
Furthermore
,
people
 would
to
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apply
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learn about new
culture
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cultures
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 throughout
study
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the study
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new
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a new
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language
.
However
, I do not find
this
 argument convincing as reasons like
study
 or
work
 can encourage
people
 to learn a new
language
.
For example
, when
a
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an
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 employee
need
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needs
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 to
work
 with
foreign
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a foreign
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 community which have to learn
foreign
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a foreign
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language
.
To conclude
, I believe
people
when
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who
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have
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having
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 a reason only going to learn
new
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a new
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language
 because they do not use
other
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another language
other languages
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language
 in their daily life.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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