In some countries, secondary schools aim to provide a general education across a range of subjects. In others, Children focus on a narrow range of subjects related to a particular career. Which do you think is appropriate in today’s world?

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Different countries have distinct views of the course
range
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that are suitable for
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to take.
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students
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can be more concentrated on
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subjects
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, I believe they should have the
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to get to know a wider
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of courses to cope with today’s developing world. In some countries, educational opportunities are only
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provide
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towards
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career
path
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.
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limited selections will make
students
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more focused on the courses they are taking and reduce the
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of
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distracting
by other unrelated
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.
This
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leads to a better understanding
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the course they take and enhance the
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efficiency
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, one secondary school student John
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has
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dreamed to become a police officer since he was 10. He can achieve his goal
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quicker by
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the
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courses at school.
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, if
children
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cannot decide what they want to do in the future,
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a general education that contains a variety of
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could be a better choice. Meanwhile, it would be difficult and unfair to let
children
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to
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choose what job to do in future before they attend secondary
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. Because they do not have a solid understanding of what their true desires are, and they do not have a very-developed mindset yet.
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,
children
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are entitled to have a
chance
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to get to know a wide
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of
subjects
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. By exploring these different
subjects
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,
children
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can find their passions in certain
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, and
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can help people to achieve higher achievement in the long run
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maintain a happier feeling during their work. In conclusion,
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narrow
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the narrow
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range
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of
subjects
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can help secondary
students
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to step into
career
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a career
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quickly, I believe that they should have a
chance
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to learn a wider
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of
subjects
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