The charts below show each grade level’s activity and the total revenue gained from it, by percentage, from King Primary School’s recent fundraising event.

The charts below show each grade level’s activity and the total revenue gained from it, by percentage, from King Primary School’s recent fundraising event.
The pie chart and table show each grade level’s organized activity, including the percentage of the total money it earned for King Primary School, at a fundraising event the school held recently.
Overall
, the table shows that each class chose to organize a unique case falling into two basic categories: match and wholesale.  The pie chart indicates that the first
graders
earned more than any other class with their dance contest,  
while
the third
graders
contributed the least to their book profit-making.  The chart
also
shows that the three earliest grades earned slightly more money than the top three grades at the school. The grades that organized discussions earned more than those that held sales.  The dance and cookie decorating meeting of the first and second
graders
brought in 23.7% and 20.9% of the total fundraising revenue respectively.  The sixth grade contributed 15.5%  towards the school’s earnings with a soccer skill contest, meaning that nearly 60% of the total action revenue came from the discussion.   The class-holding economy took in the remaining 40% of the proceeds of the act.  Nearly half of that came from the fifth
graders
, who held a bake sale that produced 18.3% of the earnings.  The third and fourth
graders
’ book and art profitable were the least successful activities, only adding 7.8% and 13.9% respectively.
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