The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of

new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the
number
of markets that were opened and closed during the period between 2011 and 2018 in a single country.
overall
, it can be seen clearly that there was a huge drop in the
number
of shops where released in 2015 in that country. In detail, the figure
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stores being launched in 2011 (above 8000) was higher
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number
of closed ones (above 6000).
furthermore
, both numbers decreased in 2012, to become slightly less than 4000 for openings, after that, an increase happened in 2013, so the closure rate recorded a
number
above 7000, to keep it higher than the opened shops by around 2000. later
on
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in 2014, these numbers became almost the same
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2014, which was more than 6000, but
then
there was a gradually declining in openings
number
at 2015, but a dramatic decrease for closures reached less than 1000,
however
, the openings process experienced a growth in 2016 at 5000, and
this
number
did not change that much in 2017 and 2018. on the other ,hand shops
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closed in 2015 was 4000 and
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remain the same in 2016,
finally
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this
total decreased to become 3000 in 2018
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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