Many criminals commit further crimes as soon as they are released from prison. What do you think are the causes of this? What effects will this have on society?

Nowadays some dangerous people keep on
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crimes
even though they have already spent a period in prison.
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essay will discuss the main reasons
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this
attitude and
then
describe the possible effects of the
problem
. In my opinion, the foremost causes of
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recidivism
of violent acts committed by some
criminals
are suffering in
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part of their life and the uncomfortable environmental conditions of prisons. Many people believe that a consistent number of
criminals
have been subjected to violent and brutal treatment during the first ages of life.
This
results in
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to react to the basic and primordial instinct to execute cruel actions.
Moreover
, prison should be a place where
criminals
have to compensate for what they have done previously in life.
However
, the jail
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often ground
of
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further
violence and
such
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context contribute to
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bad
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instincts of criminal. The possible effects of
this
problem
on society include higher numbers of
crimes
and loss of serenity among the citizens. First of all, somehow, violence calls brutality and
this
results in more
further
crimes
committed by the same person.
Secondly
, the
problem
is accentuated by a growing number of people, who struggle to rely on the capacity of
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public institutions to help
dangerous
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person
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to rebirth from
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evil and follow strictly good
principals
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of behaviour. To
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sum up
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the
recidivity
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recidivism
of loads of
criminals
is a represent a serious
problem
that has a negative impact on society. It’s mainly caused by suffering lived by
criminals
during their youth and results in
further
crimes
and loss of serenity among the citizens.
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