Nowadays scientists and tourists can travel to remote natural environments such as the south pole. What are the advantages and the disadvantages of this development?
In the
last
decades, it is shown that an increasing number of people
are
tend to visit wild Unnecessary verb
apply
environment
. Fix the agreement mistake
environments
Travel
to natural Wrong verb form
Travelling
places
brings some benefits, such
as explore
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exploring
further
deeper to
the scientists Change preposition
apply
as well as
tourists have
a chance to get priceless experiences and acquire information about unfamiliar things, Wrong verb form
having
however
there are some drawbacks.
The main advantage of visiting there is scientists can find too many necessary explorers here. It means thatAdd a comma
,however
,
Remove the comma
apply
variety
Replace the word
various
species
in diversity Change preposition
of species
that
known as extinctions can be discovered Correct pronoun usage
apply
new
Change preposition
in new
places
. A broad range of new types animals
can be found, Change preposition
of animals
thus
people
have more enough information about ecosystem
. Correct article usage
the ecosystem
On the other hand
, visitors can get valuable experience
that never seen before. They have a chance to meet local Fix the agreement mistake
experiences
people
and theirs
customs whilst Correct the word
their
environment
is investigated by its specific features. Correct article usage
the environment
People
are likely to go far away from world’s
Correct article usage
the world’s
center
to feel Change the spelling
centre
real
thrill so the first destination should be more specific Correct article usage
a real
places
such
as,
Australia, New Zealand, Remove the comma
apply
South
Pole and e.g.
Despite whole Correct article usage
the South
advantage
sides, there are some disadvantages Fix the agreement mistake
advantages
Change preposition
of traveling
traveling
to natural environments. Human beings would like to use everything for their pleasure. So some irresponsible Change the spelling
travelling
people
never pay attention to prevent
ecological pollution. It can Wrong verb form
preventing
be threaten
Change the verb form
be threatening
for
Change preposition
to
environment
because tourists throw away their own trash Add an article
the environment
in
everywhere, biodiversity of natural environments will be endangered by their actions, Change preposition
apply
such
as bury
a fire. One more important problem can be if scientists ensure that Wrong verb form
burying
this
place is wealth
for its natural resources, Replace the word
wealthy
other leader country
would like to exploit them. They can be capable to deplete its natural resources Change the wording
another leader country
other leader countries
such
as oil, precious stones and e.g.
In conclusion, although
people
get a
plenty of advantages to visit natural Remove the article
apply
places
, it cited that the threat of environmental pollution and the risk of natural resources depletion are mentioned as disadvantages.Submitted by niftaliyeva_aysel on
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