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With the rise of e-book cone the decline in paper books. Some people see this is a good step forward while others do not. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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individuals are thinking that
electronics
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books
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 usage is increasing day by day rather
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the
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paper
books
.
That is
 why people have
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different opinions
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 against paper
books
 and
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books
. I will discuss both advantages and disadvantages in
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Lets
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 begin with the benefits of
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online
books
, first of
all
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 digital
books
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 an important role to store data in unlimited storage. So we can easily read files and important notes whenever we want to
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Secondly
, Online
books
 are very easy to download and keep
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 our personal mobile phones so
that is
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 good way to read
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 we are travelling or in parks.
Furthermore
, these
books
 never need more shelves and space in
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 because we can store
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in
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 our phones or computers. For
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 of these
books
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 we do not need to cut the trees and we can save our nature in
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 manner.
For example
, e-
books
 are eco-friendly , it helps to reduce the cutting of plants and trees which
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 increasing
now a days
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.
However
, there are so many drawbacks which we cannot
negelect
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neglect
 at any rate.
Firstly
, is
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weak
eye sight
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eyesight
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 and brain because of the overuse of digital
books
. Rays of
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 directly
effects
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 our
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 activity.
Moreover
, Because of these
books
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 we need to charge the battery
that is
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 electricity on
daily
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baisis
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basis
. we cannot share
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books
 with each other as a gift so digital
books
 have eliminated our emotions and feeling
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 each other.
To conclude
,
Although
 digital
books
 have been increasing and
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people's life easier
but
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paper
books
 are more beneficial to get knowledge without any harm.
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