You have a full-time job and you are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to your teachers

Dear Sir or Madam,

This

is Kate Jin and I have been living in Galesburg for over 10 years. I really like the infrastructure of the city and have been enjoying my time here.

However

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lately

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I noticed there are more people walking their

dog

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without leashes and it has created issues in the town. Even though I love

dogs

, I know of people who are scared of them

due to

unpleasant experiences when they were young.

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, similar shadows may leave a scar

our

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children here if

dogs

chase or bark at them.

Also

although

dogs

are mostly friendly to humans, sometimes they could be very harsh to other

dogs

. The other day I saw an unleashed

dog

attacking my neighbour's

dog

. My neighbour had to pick up his

dog

to prevent a disaster from happening. I really hope you as the major and head of the municipal government, can facilitate

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writing leashing the

dog

into the law of the town and put up reminder signs. Thank you for your consideration. Best regards, Katherine

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8 paragraphs

176 words

7.00

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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