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Technology is becoming progressively universal. In the fullnness of time classroom teachers will betotally substituted for technology. Do you agree or disagree?

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Technology
 is growing every day and it seems it threatens some professions like teaching.There are two points of view in
this
 respect.Some believe teaching and
teachers
 would be faded out before long.
However
,other people think that
teachers
 are
core
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 of education without them learning lacks something. The first group who think the need for
teachers
 would be lessoned look at
this
 issue from the side that
technology
 can kill
oportunities
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opportunities
 for
teachers
 to hold their own classes since
the
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 are some
technology based
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 tools by which people can learn
languges
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languages
 or translate texts.
Therefore
,there would be no need for
real
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,human
teacher
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. Antagonists of
this
 idea are aware that always there is a need for a guide when you want to acquire something new to ask your questions in case you face
problem
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 or difficulty.Who is more beneficial than a human
teacher
 to show you the straight and fast way to achieve your response
.
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 I myself totally agree with the second group .I suppose that a
teacher
 is like a tour guide who shows the way to the followers to let them not only reach their destination from the safest ,nicest and shortest way but
also
 help them enjoy the journey as well.
To sum up
,advancing
technology
 is inevitable and it affects many things
as well as
 teaching.In
this
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 some people agree and some others disagree with
teacher
 substitution with
technology
.
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