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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many people think that
students
 in
the
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university
 should study items which they like,
however
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 others accept that
students
 must learn those
subjects
 that will help
in
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them in
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 the future. In my opinion, if
students
 are allowed to choose what they want to study, they can choose the simplest and most enjoyable
subjects
. Both sides will be discussed in the essay. On the one hand,
students
 must have
a
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 possibility to choose whatever subject they like since it gives
liberty
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them liberty
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 and independence in life. If the
students
 research
this
, they receive higher assessments . Statistically, pupils who choose the subject themselves are working with your
specialty
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.
For
this
 reason, it is important that a
university
 gives them a choice,
students
 can set their own schedule and
do
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not waste their time. The benefit to the
university
 is that there are many
students
 and they move up the ladder in education.
On the other hand
, universities do not teach unnecessary skills,
conversely
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 they do better for us. If these
subjects
 are at the
university
,
then
 they are well studied and put in
favor
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 of
students
. It is widely known that when choosing some items scientists carried out a study of what items are needed and aren't needed. Following the
rules
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,rules
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 all learners can pursue discipline and broaden
the
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their
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 mind. Distributed
according to
 the
subjects
 that
students
 need in their
specialty
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speciality
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. In conclusion, choosing
subjects
 in
university
 is important for
students
 and for their future.
Although
 universities offer better resources and conditions,
students
 must decide what they need and have the benefit of education.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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