Some people think that having a set a retirement age (e.g. 65 years ) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age. Do you agree or disagree? Which types of workers do you think should benefit from earlier retirement?

According to
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standard law of Taiwan, as long as workers meet the conditions of "working for 15
years
and at least 55
years
old" or "working for 25
years
" in the same business unit, they can apply for employment in accordance with Article 53 of the Labor Standards Law. An employer submits an application for "voluntary retirement".
However
, the average life expectancy of Taiwanese citizens is 80.6
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, in order to strengthen the use of human resources for middle-aged and elderly people and reduce the impact of "decreasing birthrates" on the workforce, experienced and healthy workers will continue to work until the
age
of 65. I disagree workers retire at an
ealier
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earlier
age
unless it is voluntary retirement, or some special career can retire at the
age
of 55;
For example
: fireman,
police man
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or athlete who need more body strength need
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to retire
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ealier
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earlier
, these jobs
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highly physical power.
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, I have dreams of retirement
age
, maybe 40
years
, but I have to buy the lottery.
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