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In many parts of the world, families were larger in the past because people had more children? Do you think there were more advantages or disadvantages to being part of a large family in the past?

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last
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 our world was agricultural more than now. Having
vast
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 amount of kids had practical meaning. I suppose being in
large
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 family
awry
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 for
children
. There were many problems
of
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with
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 using child
labor
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. And
on
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 of
this cause
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these causes
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 was
large
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a large
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 number of
children
 in the families. Parents tried to give birth, grow up and bring up more kids because it was vitally important for surviving
of
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their family. The young were used in unpaid
works
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 in the fields and domestic gardens. Despite the child
stay
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 beloved
for
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 parents every time,
value
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 of kid life was lower than now
due to
 commercial
using
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 and
high
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the high
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level
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levels
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 of infant mortality. The second disadvantage is
produce
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 by the first. It is about raising
children
. Nowadays, parents absolutely understand
responsibility
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 of having kids. It is truly important to give a decent education to
children
 and raise them in love and care. On that people need to
spent
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 a
lot
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 time, money and other resources, which they did not have in the past. In conclusion, having a lot of relatives is awesome now.
However
, in the
past
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 there were many
difficults
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difficulties
 and dangers for
children
.
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