In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of crime? How can we deal with those causes?

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Recent years have witnessed an increase in
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crime
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rate
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around the world.
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some ways to cope with these. One main cause can be
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of
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and job skills. Despite the advancements in
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education
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system in many societies, it seems that more and more
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living in deprived areas or societies with poor
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encounter poor educational infrastructure.
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, most of them find it difficult to educate or learn professional skills.
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may increase the likelihood of unemployment, resulting in feelings of hopelessness which can contribute to turning to
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.
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, mental health issues that have not been treated can be another cause
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criminal
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. Most offenders, particularly those who commit
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crimes, suffer from different types of underlying psychotic disorders, so they may have a tendency to offending activities. A possible way to deal with
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aid to provide educational opportunities.
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, through donating money to international charity organizations by both citizens and governments, these organizations can allocate scholarships to
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from deprived areas, so they benefit from
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education
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. After coming back to their society, they can teach their knowledge and skills to local
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not only to improve educational infrastructure
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but
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to create better job opportunities, resulting in enhancing positive feelings and satisfaction.
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to that, both governments and experts can take some measures to decrease the criminal consequences of mental illnesses. They both together are able to increase mental health campaigns to raise public awareness about personality disorders and treatments’ ways
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people
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with a safe atmosphere to encourage them to talk about their personality traits, so they can go for
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treatment. In conclusion, there are some causes of committing
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crime
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such
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deficit and untreated underlying mental diseases.
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, some ways
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and increasing mental health awareness campaigns would be warranted to deal with these causes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic disparity
  • propensity
  • recidivism
  • deterrent
  • rehabilitative
  • judicial system
  • corruption
  • socioeconomic
  • alienation
  • stigmatization
  • decriminalization
  • enforcement
  • gentrification
  • preemptive measures
  • intervention strategies
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