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The world has been an enormous increase in flights for leisure, business and commercial purposes around the world over the recent years. Why do you think are the main advantages and disadvantages of such flights? Do you think flights should be taxed more?

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A number of studies show that in recent time, there
have
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 been an unprecedented boost in
airlines
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 industries over the globe.
According to
 the reports, airways are nowadays used for travel and trade which ensure easy connectivity, cultural exchange
as well as
 economic growth.
Although
 it sometimes paves the way
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 terrorist activities and trafficking, Government should not impose high tax rather implement laws. Here, the following paragraphs aim to highlight both pros and
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rapid development
along with
 the actions that should be taken by the Authorities to mitigate disadvantages. To start with, the advantages of
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 use of aeroplanes outweigh its drawbacks. First of all, people can move
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 North to South just in
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 hours today which was unthinkable in
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 century.
For instance
, it is noted that various tourist places like Eiffel Tower in Paris, Tajmahal in India
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 Niagara Falls in the USA have
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 by a large number of people
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 contributes a lot to
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there
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 annual budget.
In addition
, fast
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travel
 attracts individuals to explore new sports and states can spread
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 norms, fashions, cuisines and so on.
Likewise
,
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 are frequently used by industrialists to import and export.
As a result
, multinational companies are often seen in
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isolated Island today.
On the contrary
, it opens a new path to export valuable resources which might
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cause
 in lase for a country. To protect national wealth and prevent unlawful acts, Government should make regulations. In nutshell, flights bring comfort to people and give them the opportunity to explore new knowledge. So, if high taxation is imposed, it becomes more expensive.
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