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Nowadays food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live?

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Food
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 but essential source of living. The natives feel that
food
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 has become easier to prepare and has changed their way of living. Nowadays, we can prepare
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 instantly with the help of modern techniques which
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 less time
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. It has become easier for society to cook fresh
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 instantly with the help of gadgets.
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, nowadays the most important appliance used in the kitchen is the microwave which instantly heats the
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. It has many features like frying, baking and cooking etc. It has become an essential part of human life. Not just the microwave but there are many other appliances like fridge and mixer which helps
people
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 to cook
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 quickly.
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, it has definitely improved and fast-paced the
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 of
people
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. Modern methods of preserving
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also
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 save a lot of time. A person can freeze purees and paste which are essential for cooking for months in the freezer. It reduces a lot of cooking time.
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, the best part is that the
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 does not lose its nutrition. Nowadays, many companies have produced instant
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 which is an alternative to traditional cooking.
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 it has both advantages and disadvantages, it outweighs its disadvantages.
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, Instant noodles are cooked in 2 minutes and contain vegetables, proteins and high calories which are required for good health.
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,
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 companies have improved the lives of
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 by innovating instant
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. In conclusion,
people
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's life has become easier as now they don't have to cook
food
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 for hours because of technology and companies.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Modern appliances
  • Pre-packaged meals
  • Cooking time
  • Nutritional value
  • Public health
  • Work-life balance
  • Cultural heritage
  • Food industry
  • Processed foods
  • Packaging waste
  • Social bonding
  • Culinary skills
  • International cuisine
  • Preservatives
  • Additives
  • Contamination
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