You play a team sport with some friends. Last week a member of the team had an accident and wasn’t able to play with you at the weekend. You decide to write to him in the hospital, telling him about the match

Dear Amber, I hope you are in the pink of your health.
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has been too long
to
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meet you. I am writing
this
letter to inform you that I am moving to your country and I need some help from you regarding finding a
job
. As you know I had finished my graduation in management. now I will come to Canada for my post-graduation. I have taken
admission
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in
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MBA in Brampton University. During the time of my study, I really want to do some part-time work because It is quite hard to survive in a foreign country without money.
Apart from
this
, I would like to do a
job
to cover my daily requirement.
Such
as Rent of accommodation fee charges, food and So on. You
also
know about my financial background. So I do not put any extra burden on my family.
Overall
, I think I am enough mature to take care of my expenses
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own. I send my
C.V
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CV
to you in your g-mail account. I request you please find a part-time
job
for me which suits my resume. If possible
then
make a list of the various
job
so that when I come there I don’t need to waste my time searching
vacancies
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. Thank you in advance and we do fun together when I will with you. with love, Manpreet.
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