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Nowadays many people choose ready made food and refuse to cook at home. Why do you think it happens? What are the advantage and disadvantage of such a choice?

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People prefer to
ready made
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 food rather than
to cook
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cooking
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 at home recently. The
bussier
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busier
bustier
 of jobs or
bussines
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business
 encourages them to do that
,
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 because they can reduce
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time
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the time
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 for cook and
eat
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.
However
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,
the
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fast food brings some
of
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the healthy
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healthy
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health
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problem
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for
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in
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a
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 long term and it will cost more. Nowadays, people work for more hours in
hope
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the hope
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 to increase their income
due to
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 the raise
of
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in
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 goods. In Indonesia, the labours can spend 12 hours a day
for
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working and just get a holiday
for
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each week. It makes
they
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them
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 have
no
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not
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 enough
time
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 for their family, for dinner and for sleep. The precious
of
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time
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make
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makes
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 they want to have more
time
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 with family and reduce to preparing cook
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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