For a long time art has been considered an essential part of all cultures in the world. However, nowadays people’s values have changed, and we tend to consider science, technology and business more important than arts. What do you think are the causes of this? What can be done to draw people’s attention to art?

It is undeniable that
art
is a vital aspect
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human beings. Everywhere we go and everything we see, we can spot all things created by someone’s ideas and creativity. Sadly now, there are only a few
people
who think and realize that
art
is as valuable as
science
, technology, and business. The main reasons and possible solutions will be discussed in the following paragraphs. To commence,
people
are mostly aware of how rapidly our technology and digital transformation are shifting now.
Therefore
, they have tended to see
science
as a prestigious field that they need to master in the
last
40 or 50 years.
Additionally
, they seem to forget the fact that aspect
also
plays a pivotal role in all of the high-tech innovations which they are using most of the time,
such
as mobile phones, video games, and so on. By having that view, it is obvious why they do not consider
art
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the way it is.
Besides
this
cause happening to
the
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art
, the stigma that pursuing
art
does not help
people
make enough money for a living is quite common in society. If you come across a job portal website, you will quickly find out that
science
and engineering jobs, like software developer, business analyst, and full stack engineer have way higher salaries compared to
art
and social sciences jobs,
such
as videographer, content writer, and even illustrator. From that, we can fully understand that many
people
do not have any interest in
art
as a career, and the stigma is not merely an assumption. To tackle
this
issue, some efforts are necessitated or required. I believe we can fix these kinds of prejudice (lack of attention, devoid of enthusiasm, and vulnerable income) toward
art
by appreciating it more,
such
as giving platforms for artists to explore their creativity, supporting them, and not undervaluing them. By giving them a safe place to create, they will be more appreciated.
As a result
, a lot of
people
will consider
art
as an interesting and promising field. Not only that, as we
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will become a parent, we can encourage our future children to pursue
art
as a career
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just a hobby. By having
this
mindset, we can make
art
as
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a valuable aspect of our life again, possibly leading to or paving the way
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how to attract the attention of societies,
such
as young learners, adolescents, youngsters, middle-aged
people
and even senior citizens. In summary, what have discussed above,
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showed
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that it is considered just like
science
and technology that
art
is a pivotal part and
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a very impactful effects
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to
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our everyday life.
Thus
, we, as
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human
creature
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, need to value it as we cannot even live without it,
therefore
, let us be more appreciative towards
art
from now on.
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  • STEM fields (Science, Technology, Engineering, and Mathematics)
  • evolve
  • technological advancements
  • overshadowing
  • financial pressures
  • practical careers
  • digital entertainment
  • accessible
  • integrated
  • curricula
  • fostering
  • emotional intelligence
  • public art projects
  • engage
  • interactive
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