Some people think that parents should tell stories or read to their children. However, others believe that these days this isn’t necessary as children have so many other sources for stories, such as books, films and TV. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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think that more
parents
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WIHT
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THEM
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children
, THESE ARE
INPOTANT
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IMPORTANT
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CHILDREN
. MANY
CHILDREN
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UNDERSTAND
THE TV OR FILMS IF TV OR FILMS WILL FOR ELDERS,
SUCH
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PARENYS
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PARENTS
TELL ME THE
STORIS
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STORIES
OR READ ME WHEN I WAS
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A CHILD
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. THE
CHILDREN
CAN NOT DO THESE WITHOUT
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THEIR PARENTS
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PARENTS
MUST
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TEACH
US OR HRLP US
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BEFORE THEY WERE A 18 YEARS OLD. HOW WE WILL GROW UP WITHOUT
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THIS
IS VERY DIFFICULT, NO ONE WILL NOT HOW OUR
PARENTS
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PARENTS
HAVE TO BRING UP US. WE CAN NOT DO
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bonding experience
  • emotional connection
  • listening and comprehension skills
  • live storytelling
  • high-quality storytelling
  • values and morals
  • variety of storytelling mediums
  • visual literacy
  • interpretive skills
  • convenience factor
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