Some people say now there is less communication between family members than in the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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It is argued that communication between family members declined recently.
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essay completely agrees with the above statement because today's hectic
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and different scientific inventions have driven people apart from themselves.
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,in
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contemporary era,
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has become very difficult to lead. As
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became very competitive,
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has to
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about 8-10 hours a day to lead a happy
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.
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, without working hard
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cannot provide his family with
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basic needs like food and clothes as the price of every domestic product
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risen up .
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,
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has to
work
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day and night to increase their standard of living and to survive in
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competitive society. That's why because of
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hectic
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one
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cannot give his family the time they need.
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, because of today's different modern
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we are no longer dependent on our family members.
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,  if we need any help regarding any topic , we can look on the Internet or can do our
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easily with different scientific inventions.
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, the distance between  the people increased .
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,earlier people used to be dependent on each other as they were not much familiar with
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modern scientific machines but now they can easily get their
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done with the help of the Internet. Thereby, we can say, different modern types of machinery and
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busy
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one
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could not  give their time to their family which resulted in
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distance between them .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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