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The graph shows the percentage of UK adolescents following a vegetarian diet.

The graph shows the percentage of UK adolescents following a vegetarian diet.
The given line graph illustrates the proportion of teenagers who followed a vegetarian diet in the United Kingdom over 60 years. It can be clearly seen that there was some fluctuation over the given period. In detail, the percentage of adolescent vegetarians rose dramatically from 0 to over 15 per
cent
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 between 1960 to 1980.
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, the number sharply dropped to over 5 per
cent
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 in 1990. There was some fluctuation between 1990 to 2000. After 2000, the percentage started to rise up gradually until it reached of point of almost 12 per
cent
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 in 2010.
Finally
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, almost 12 per
cent
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 of United Kingdom teenagers followed a vegetable-based diet.
To sum up
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, adolescent vegetarians in the United Kingdom rose from 0 to almost 12 per
cent
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 with a noticeable fluctuation over the 60 years.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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