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Children should play online games nowadays. Discuss advantages and disadvantages.

#children #games
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It is partially true that
people
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 can learn about
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 through playing
games
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. There is
the
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evidence ground to underpin
this
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opinion
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. Taking an example, there are various kinds of
games
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such
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 as board
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game
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, sports
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game
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games
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 and computer
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game
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games
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.
In particular
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, playing sports
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game
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games
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 and computer
game
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 need to
cooperating
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 among players, and all
player
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players
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 have to have a variety of strategies to win
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 players,
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,
people
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 are not able to overcome the missions of
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. As
it
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can be seen from the example, cooperation and strategy are ones of
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necessities
to
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people
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 to live their
life
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 successfully. Considering the statement above, the first insistence could be believed to be acceptable. As far as the other
opinion
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 is concerned, the latter perspective should be emphasized more, and there are more compelling rationales pertaining to
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opinion
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. First of all, a
game
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 is just a
game
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, namely, living
a
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life
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 is basically different from playing a
game
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.
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,
people
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 are able to restart even if they would continually fail
games
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, but
people
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’s
life
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 should not be restarted.
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people
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 have
once
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 mistake in their daily
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, they cannot return the mistake, it could lead to failure
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 their
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.
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,
life
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 is much more complicated than
games
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.
people
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 who play well
games
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 are not necessarily well at living their
life
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. A variety of skills for playing
games
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 could not be needed by
people
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 who live real
life
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 in society. Pondering on
aforementioned
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the aforementioned
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 statement, it is more reasonable to take the latter view as the established
opinion
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. In conclusion, it is different each other between qualities for living
life
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 and skills for playing
games
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.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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