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Fresh water has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. What are the causes of the increased demand, what measurements can governments and individuals take to respond to this problem?

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Our globe is covered with one-fourth of fresh
water
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 and the rest is filled with salt
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. So, it has always been a limited supply of fresh
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 leads to a huge
demand
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 that has made a global concern. I do agree with
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 statement and there are some reasons that will be driven for increasing
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, it is an equal responsibility of both nations and individuals must tackle
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 problem.
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 with, drinking
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 is more efficient for survival for any living entity. Indeed, fresh
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 is very limited availability and it has been observed that growing worldwide
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.
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, we can see that there are many reasons which caused
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 huge freshwater requirement across the different communities.
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, most activities
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 as not only industrial and economical boom will be flourished
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 the
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 but
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 important for agriculture as well.
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, the article published that 90 per cent of areas have developed
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 the availability of
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 resources indeed. So, it has been proven that
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 for freshwater across the globe for various reasons, and it is an essential part of any growing community.
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, nowadays we can see that shortage of
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 around the planet, has dramatically increased, and impacted most parts of the world, which leads
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 scarcity in many populated countries indeed.
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, middle east countries have constructed
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 treatment plants in order to
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 salt
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 for our day-to-day activities. So, In order to implement
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 phenomenon, both government and individuals must take possible solutions before going to the edge.
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, humans must
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 not only recycled
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while
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use
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 some techniques
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 as tightening
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 taps. So, it has been proven that the storage and recycling of
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 are essential to fulfilling freshwater issues. In conclusion, governments and individuals. should do more in order to tackle the growing
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otherwise
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,
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 scarcity will become severe around the globe
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