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The charts below show reasons for travel and the main issues for the travelling public in the US in 2009. Summarise it.

The charts below show reasons for travel and the main issues for the travelling public in the US in 2009. Summarise it.
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The purposes of
travel
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 and the challenges people faced when travelling
public
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in public
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 in the US in 2009 are illustrated in the given charts.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the main reason for
travel
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 was to attend their work, and the worst challenge to their commuting was the cost of
travel
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. As shown in the bar chart,
majority
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the majority
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 of the US residents commuted to go to and return from their
work places
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workplaces
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, and
this
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 accounted
to
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for
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 just below
the
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apply
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half of the total who travelled. Personal reasons and shopping were the next major reasons for them to
travel
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. The rates of those who did so were 19 and 16 respectively. When around a tenth of the total
travel
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 was attributed to social or recreational, the least was for visiting friends or relatives (6%).

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words travel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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