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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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the map
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the improvement of
small
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the small
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 town of
ryemouth
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Tynemouth
Greymouth
 in the given
periods
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period
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,which
are
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is
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 1995 and nowadays.
overall
,we can see the
numper
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number
 of accommodations
have
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has
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 increased ,
while
 the markets and shops
ruduced
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reduced
.
furthermore
,the natural environment like
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the forest
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forest
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forests
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 has
converted
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been converted
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 into
play grounds
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playgrounds
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 and parks. in 1995, to the
east
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,east
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 there were forest
park
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parks
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 and farmland.
furthermore
,
hotel
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a hotel
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 and cafe are situated south
to
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of
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 them where a shop and fish marker
in
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are in
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 front
to
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of
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 them at the west .
additionally
, there are several houses at the northwest of the map.
in
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At
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pesent
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present
,variant
chaneges
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changes
occured
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occurred
 in order to make the area more
sutible
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suitable
 for
turist
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tourist
.
however
, shops have been
repalced
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replaced
 by restaurants and apartments ,which are more needed by visitors,
car
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and car
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 parks
were add
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were added
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 to the hotel
that
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which
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 remain the same since 1995.
moreover
, new houses have been
builded
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built
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 where a new road was
also
constructed
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been constructed
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.the forest and park turned into golf and tennis.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore".
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformation
  • key features
  • contrasting
  • developments
  • alterations
  • enhancements
  • infrastructure
  • recreational facilities
  • emerging
  • adaptation
  • population growth
  • connectivity
  • accessibility
  • preserve
  • aesthetics
  • analytically
  • livability
  • notable facilities
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