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Some people believe that children should not be given homework every day, while others believe that they must get homework every day in order to be successful at school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Part of society thinks that
children
 do not need to do
homework
 after every
school
day
, and another part thinks that
children
 should do
homework
 every
day
. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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this
 is not very necessary for
children
 every
day
. because they already spend more of their
time
 at
school
, more than half of their
time
. Of
course
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course,
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homework
 is needed, but not every
day
.
Children
 need to spend a lot of
time
 with their
family
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families
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, when
children
 come home after
school
 they will be tired and need rest and
children
also
 need more
time
 for physical activity.
And if
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If
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 at
school
 they were given
homework
, they simply
won’t
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wouldn’t
 have
time
 for games and rest, and they
can
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could
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 forget about spending
time
 with their parents.
For example
, I myself
also
 went through
this
. After
school
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school,
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 I went to sports and additional courses, but there was almost no
time
 left for games and rest, and it was very difficult for me to cope with
such
 a schedule . and that’s why I simply didn’t do my
homework
 and got a lot of bad grades at
school
 Personally, I don’t agree with
this
 opinion, and I think that
homework
 is an extra burden for the child. it can affect the child's development and character badly
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Introduce the essay with a brief explanation of the conflicting views on homework for children to provide a clear foundation for your discussion.
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Clearly state your thesis statement or main argument in the introduction to guide the reader through your essay.
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Develop separate paragraphs for discussing the views you do not agree with, providing counterarguments or reasons for your disagreement.
coherence and cohesion
Enhance the logical structure by organizing the essay into clear paragraphs: an introduction, body paragraphs for each view, and a conclusion summarizing your main points and stating your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words and phrases ('However,' 'Furthermore,' 'In contrast') to better connect ideas and paragraphs, improving the flow of the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Conclude your essay with a brief summary of the discussed viewpoints and your personal stance, reinforcing your argument.

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