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you recently stayed in a hotel in a large city. the weather was very unusal and the heating/cooling system in the hotel was inadequate

#hotel #city #weather #system
Dear
Mr.
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Shodi, I am writing
this
 letter to express dissatisfaction with my stay at your hotel which
named
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 "
Severniy
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Serenity
" . Unfortunately,
due to
 the malfunctioning of the air conditioner,
three
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 nights I spent at
yourhotel
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your hotel
 were miserable. It was July 17th when I arrived at the hotel. I wanted to get some rest after working hard during the day. When I turned on the air conditioner, it started to make
noise
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 and didn't work as expected. I called the front desk stating the problem and they promised to fix it within two hours, but no help was received and no
further
 updates. I have been dealing with the fan all night. I choose your hotel after reading reviews online, but much to my chagrin I realized that they were not exactly true. I would like you to refund the amount I have paid for the air conditioner room.
In addition
, I request you to check all the amenities before booking
to
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 customers. Please consider my request to
refund
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a refund
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 and do the needful Thank you in advance for your help. Yours faithfully, Aleksandr Makedonskiy
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