The line graph below shows the international student enrolment numbers at De Salle University from 1980 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.

The line graph below shows the international student enrolment numbers at De Salle University from 1980 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.
This
line graph illustrates the thousands of
students
admitted at De Salle
University
from five different countries, India, Vietnam, Nepal, Indonesia and Colombia, between 1980 and 2020. The number of
students
enrolled at De Salle
University
increased significantly from all
the
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five countries over the four decades. There is a continuous increase
of
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student admission at the
university
. The most significant increase was from India, the number of
students
increased from 500 to 15000 in the
year
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1980 and 2020 respectively.
Also
, there was
big
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difference
of
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students
registered at the
university
over one decade,
that is
between 2010 and 2020,
at
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Vietnam and Nepal. Colombia registered the least amount of
students
throughout the years, registering none in the year 1980 and about 1500
students
in 2020.
Similarly
, the enrolment of
Indonesia
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students
at the
University
shows
minimal
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difference over the decades with lower admission,
this
ranges between 800
students
and 7800
students
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrolment numbers
  • international students
  • line graph
  • De Salle University
  • significant changes
  • sharp increases
  • stability
  • decline
  • fluctuations
  • global economic conditions
  • university policies
  • external factors
  • campus diversity
  • resources
  • reputation
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