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You are a current student of Loren Brusque University, studying Business Administration. You want to apply for the post of Quality Assurance Manager you have recently seen on the university's notice board. Write a letter to Mr. Walker and - Give your reason for writting - Tell about your education - Describe your work experience and explain why you would be suitable for the job

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Dear
Mr.
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 Walker, My name is Patryk, I am
current
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 student
of
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 Loren Brosque University. I am
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 the
last
 year of Bussiness Administration,
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 June will have my ending exams. Now I prepare very hard
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 because it left only a few weeks.After
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 my education
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univeristy
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university
 I am looking for
good
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 job in
Quality
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 section. Two days ago I just saw a notice on
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the univeristy
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univeristy
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university
 board. I am
writting
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 to Mr. in
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 case. I am very
instrest
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interest
 in
job
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the job
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 offer - Quality Assurance Manager.
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 I study only at weekends,
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 the
week days
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weekdays
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 I work at the shop
like
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deputy
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a deputy
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 quality manager. I work there for one year, but I prefer
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the logistic
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logistic
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logistics
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 sector, like your company. If you want to talk with me, here is
phone
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my phone
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 number: 000-000-000, you can contact me
also
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this
adrees
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address
 email ([email protected]). If you have any additional questions I am
avaible
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available
. I look forward to your reply. Thank you in advance! Yours faithfully, Patryk
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