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In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather than buying them. What are the advantages and disadvatages of renting a home ?

#countries #people #rent #homes #disadvatages #home
Nowadays real estate market is
huge
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 part of
economy
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the economy
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in
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of
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whole
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 world.
Diffrent
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Different
people
 in
diffrent
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different
country
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countries
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 choose
accomondation
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accommodation
 every day. For most
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populations
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population
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,population
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 it is not simple to do it.
People
 are divided into two types, a lot of them prefer renting
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a place
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place
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places
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 to
life
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live
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 and
other
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others
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 are
chooseing
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choosing
build
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to build
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 or buy homes or flats. In my
view
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 there are some pros and cons to both
option
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options
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. In
develop
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developing
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 countries most young
people
 prefer
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to rent
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rent
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renting
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 an
accomondation
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accommodation
.
Firstly
, now
rent
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renting
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 a place is simple,
in
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on
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 the internet is more and more announcement, you can
chose
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choose
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 the best option for you.
For example
, if you prefer
quiet
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a quiet
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 location or near
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the center
a center
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center
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centre
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city
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,city
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 you can contact with owner or company and rent it.
Secondly
, currently many
person's
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people
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travel
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travels
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 a lot, they have online work so they can work wherever they want. In my
opinion
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 it is very fantastic and flexible.
On the other
hand
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 you can not do
everyting
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everything
 because it is not your own. If you buy a home you can do
everyting
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everything
, you can decide for yourself what the house will look like.
Moreover
 home will always be yours, in the
futher
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further
future
 your child.
Buy
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Buying
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 a home or flat is very expensive,
most
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and most
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people
 don't have enough money for that. They must get credit in the bank for
long
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the long
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 term. Nowadays inflation is high and credits are
also
 expensive. In
conlusion
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conclusion
,
people
 must decide the best way for them. We have a lot of advantages and disadvantages
for
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to
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 buying homes or renting them.
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