the costs of intrnational travel are decresing and tourism is growing . what are the advantages and diadvantages.

Travelling these days is easier and cheaper than ever and that
leads
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to booming in
tourists
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numbers.
countries
can benefit from
this
large grow in
tourists
and the
tourists
get to know and learn about other nations but there are
also
some drawbacks to be taken into account. On the one hand, there is a number of advantages to tourism and low-cost flights.
Firstly
, some
countries
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country's
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income depends on the profit that comes from
tourists
.
For example
,
Lebanon
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income
rely
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on
tourists
because it does not have any natural resources or big industries so the Lebanese
keen
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on
opening
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the opening
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restaurant, hotels, pools and other
entertaining
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facilities.
Secondly
, Cheap flight tickets allow people to
travel
and discover other nations.
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leads to
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us
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as human beings, because when we get to know others and learn their traditions and habits, we learn how to show respect and avoid offending them.
On the other hand
, one problem when there is a huge number of
tourists
visiting specific cities
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it makes it easier for terrorist groups to
travel
to other
countries
.
As a result
, in recent years terrorist attacks have spread all over the world which have killed a lot of innocent victims. Another issue is
travel
addiction. Some people might love the idea of spending time in another country
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partying and having
good
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time
however
that could get out of their hands and be addicted to it, which might
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their peace and job.
To sum up
,
while
some
countries
can benefit from tourism and easy travelling, it can lead to terrorist attacks and
travel
addiction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural exchange
  • Intercultural dialogue
  • Economic benefits
  • Infrastructure development
  • Personal growth
  • Environmental impact
  • Cultural dilution
  • Economic dependence
  • Global travel trends
  • Fluctuations
  • Commercialization
  • Authenticity
  • Vulnerable
  • Sustainable tourism
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