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the costs of intrnational travel are decresing and tourism is growing . what are the advantages and diadvantages.

#costs #travel #tourism #diadvantages
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Travelling these days is easier and cheaper than ever and that
leads
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 to booming in
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tourists
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tourist
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 numbers.
countries
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 can benefit from
this
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 large grow in
tourists
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 and the
tourists
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 get to know and learn about other nations but there are
also
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 some drawbacks to be taken into account. On the one hand, there is a number of advantages to tourism and low-cost flights.
Firstly
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, some
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countries
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country's
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 income depends on the profit that comes from
tourists
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.
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Lebanon
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 income
rely
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 on
tourists
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 because it does not have any natural resources or big industries so the Lebanese
keen
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 on
opening
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the opening
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 restaurant, hotels, pools and other
entertaining
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 facilities.
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, Cheap flight tickets allow people to
travel
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 and discover other nations.
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 leads to
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us
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 as human beings, because when we get to know others and learn their traditions and habits, we learn how to show respect and avoid offending them.
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, one problem when there is a huge number of
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 visiting specific cities
that
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 it makes it easier for terrorist groups to
travel
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 to other
countries
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.
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, in recent years terrorist attacks have spread all over the world which have killed a lot of innocent victims. Another issue is
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 addiction. Some people might love the idea of spending time in another country
for
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apply
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partying and having
good
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a good
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 time
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 that could get out of their hands and be addicted to it, which might
threat
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 their peace and job.
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while
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 some
countries
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 can benefit from tourism and easy travelling, it can lead to terrorist attacks and
travel
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 addiction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural exchange
  • Intercultural dialogue
  • Economic benefits
  • Infrastructure development
  • Personal growth
  • Environmental impact
  • Cultural dilution
  • Economic dependence
  • Global travel trends
  • Fluctuations
  • Commercialization
  • Authenticity
  • Vulnerable
  • Sustainable tourism
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